Monday, November 3 - Friday, November 7
Friday
It was Friday today so we did another rousing activity to review/practice some of those 185 Provincial Exam terms and devices. The girls were the clear victors on this occasion! Afterwards we returned to the Hemingway essay; the good copy accompanied by the rough draft and criteria sheet, is due next Thursday, November 13th.
Thursday
I returned almost everyone's Hemingway essay today. After identifying all those cryptic red scribbles on your drafts, I gave you some more essay tips:
use present tense
no quotes to prove an event happened
not all evidence needs to be a quote
use characters last names
don't say he does a good job!
write so a person who has not read the text can follow your arguments
Wednesday
After a bit of time on the NetBooks practicing exam terms, we turned our attention back to the Hemingway essay. Again, some positive feedback on the essays I am reviewing would include: improved introductions, better thesis statements, embedded quotes! The compare and contrast structure seems to be giving more than a few people some difficulty. We looked at an example I created of an outline for this type of essay - which can be very challenging to write. Tomorrow I will try to write an essay infront of the class!
Tuesday
Compare & Contrast sample outline
I was away today, but here are the notes I left for my replacement.
Silent reading for first 15 minutes.
Students have an article that they are to go through looking for what the writer has used to achieve bias in the article. We discussed the use of “loaded language” and using generalizations to create bias. Here are some others students should look for in the text
Manipulation including:
imagery (5 senses), shock value, impressive vocabulary, relatable, facts, statistics, emotional appeal, humour, flashback, voice, suspense, irony, mood, paradox, directly involving readers, alliteration, hyperbole, metaphor, simile, personification, oxymoron, contradicting popular opinion, pun, caricature, onomatopoeia, symbolism.
Please have them go through the article again, looking for examples of the ones the writer has used and create a T chart. Ask them to provide paragraph # for the examples:
In paragraph form and in at least 150 words, Discuss the author’s use of bias techniques in Steak Shows Its Muscles. Hand-in the Organization and Planning T-chart with your written response to the article
work. The mark for your answer will be based on the appropriateness of the examples
you use as well as the adequacy of your explanation and the quality of
your written expression.
Criteria for a 6
The six response is superior and may draw upon any number of factors, such as depth of discussion,
effectiveness of argument, or level of insight. It exhibits an effective writing style and a sophisticated use of
language. Despite its clarity and precision, the response need not be error-free.
Monday
Today was interim day and I returned your essays about "A Short Story." Thanks to everyone for the feedback that you gave me on the essay writing process we went through. Some comments that stood out for me were related to how useful the feeedback on the rough draft was and that feedback on the good copy of the essay would be welcome. If you would like to know more about your good copy please let me know and we can arrange a time to chat - it will be clearer and quicker than me writing more comments on your paper. Overall, for a first essay of the year, the class has done well. There are many strengths in your writing and story insights. We will work more on how to build those into your written work.
Next we turned back to examining A.A. Gills article about steak. I have been asking you to look through the article and find the "tools of bias" that the writer has used, for example loaded language (words that evoke strong emotional/connotative meanings) and generalizations (lumping an entire group into one sweeping statement). There are many, many more things biased writing may contain:
alarmist language, alliteration, analogy, anecdote, attacks/praise, citing precedent, cliches, colloquial language, exaggeration, generalizations, humour, hyperbole, inclusive language, imagery, irony, metaphor, pun, rebuttal, repetition, rhetorical questions, satire, sensationalism, simile, specialist/scientific language, statistics, trivializing an issue, emotional appeals (to authority, appeal to common sense, appeal to family values, appeal to fear/insecurity, appeal to hip-pocket nerve, appeal to tradition/customs, appeal to loyalty/patriotism, appeal to sense of justice).
It was Friday today so we did another rousing activity to review/practice some of those 185 Provincial Exam terms and devices. The girls were the clear victors on this occasion! Afterwards we returned to the Hemingway essay; the good copy accompanied by the rough draft and criteria sheet, is due next Thursday, November 13th.
Thursday
I returned almost everyone's Hemingway essay today. After identifying all those cryptic red scribbles on your drafts, I gave you some more essay tips:
use present tense
no quotes to prove an event happened
not all evidence needs to be a quote
use characters last names
don't say he does a good job!
write so a person who has not read the text can follow your arguments
Wednesday
After a bit of time on the NetBooks practicing exam terms, we turned our attention back to the Hemingway essay. Again, some positive feedback on the essays I am reviewing would include: improved introductions, better thesis statements, embedded quotes! The compare and contrast structure seems to be giving more than a few people some difficulty. We looked at an example I created of an outline for this type of essay - which can be very challenging to write. Tomorrow I will try to write an essay infront of the class!
Tuesday
Compare & Contrast sample outline
I was away today, but here are the notes I left for my replacement.
Silent reading for first 15 minutes.
Students have an article that they are to go through looking for what the writer has used to achieve bias in the article. We discussed the use of “loaded language” and using generalizations to create bias. Here are some others students should look for in the text
Manipulation including:
imagery (5 senses), shock value, impressive vocabulary, relatable, facts, statistics, emotional appeal, humour, flashback, voice, suspense, irony, mood, paradox, directly involving readers, alliteration, hyperbole, metaphor, simile, personification, oxymoron, contradicting popular opinion, pun, caricature, onomatopoeia, symbolism.
Please have them go through the article again, looking for examples of the ones the writer has used and create a T chart. Ask them to provide paragraph # for the examples:
| Bias tools | Examples from the text |
generalization loaded language |
“Steak houses used to be leathery, clubbable lounges with cartoons of dead customers on the walls...” paragraph 5 “cheeks bulging with body-heat gore” paragraph 2 |
In paragraph form and in at least 150 words, Discuss the author’s use of bias techniques in Steak Shows Its Muscles. Hand-in the Organization and Planning T-chart with your written response to the article
work. The mark for your answer will be based on the appropriateness of the examples
you use as well as the adequacy of your explanation and the quality of
your written expression.
Criteria for a 6
The six response is superior and may draw upon any number of factors, such as depth of discussion,
effectiveness of argument, or level of insight. It exhibits an effective writing style and a sophisticated use of
language. Despite its clarity and precision, the response need not be error-free.
Monday
Today was interim day and I returned your essays about "A Short Story." Thanks to everyone for the feedback that you gave me on the essay writing process we went through. Some comments that stood out for me were related to how useful the feeedback on the rough draft was and that feedback on the good copy of the essay would be welcome. If you would like to know more about your good copy please let me know and we can arrange a time to chat - it will be clearer and quicker than me writing more comments on your paper. Overall, for a first essay of the year, the class has done well. There are many strengths in your writing and story insights. We will work more on how to build those into your written work.
Next we turned back to examining A.A. Gills article about steak. I have been asking you to look through the article and find the "tools of bias" that the writer has used, for example loaded language (words that evoke strong emotional/connotative meanings) and generalizations (lumping an entire group into one sweeping statement). There are many, many more things biased writing may contain:
alarmist language, alliteration, analogy, anecdote, attacks/praise, citing precedent, cliches, colloquial language, exaggeration, generalizations, humour, hyperbole, inclusive language, imagery, irony, metaphor, pun, rebuttal, repetition, rhetorical questions, satire, sensationalism, simile, specialist/scientific language, statistics, trivializing an issue, emotional appeals (to authority, appeal to common sense, appeal to family values, appeal to fear/insecurity, appeal to hip-pocket nerve, appeal to tradition/customs, appeal to loyalty/patriotism, appeal to sense of justice).
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